One Cold December Night

on the spot

i stand

frozen

and i try

to let my heart breathe

but it's hard

when you've done

nothing but trouble

and now

is the only thing i see

and now is the only

way out

nothings happened before

what makes you think it'll happen now

i can't rely on my feelings

i need a pulse

a beat

to tell me when to go

so i'll go

when my heart beats

and i'll do it all 

                                   even if i fall

Reviews

[Valentine]

One never knows if they give up before they try. Valentine

[Jen Walters]

beautiful description of cold, loneliness and despair. I also love the touch of hope at the end, the drive to keep moving, keep going. We all need this, even in our weakest moments, though we find it hard to do so. This is a beautiful poem of heartache and sadness, as well as hope. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful write and have a great day.

[sarik]

go with it..

where your heart take Ms Hazra..

liked !!

[Shah Sabia]

Beautifully linked, i like the transitions.

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

I love the line "I'll do it all even if I fall"....nicely inked.

[FaeryQueen]

thank you!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

"i'll do it all
even if i fall"
Beautifully explained the delima.
Well done!

[FaeryQueen]

thank you, i ted to get a lot of reviews for my on the spot writing, which is good because i like writing on the spot.