The unknown short rhyme/poem

The sun shines down on the Earth,

While people go back and forth.

Flowers bloom,

while race cars zoom.

So many people work hard every day,

while others prefer to be alone at bay.

while the monkeys play,

the humans call it a day.

no one knows why there is no peace,

while people are always calling the police.

Author's Note

This was a random thing that came from a dream recently.
What do you think of it? I know it's very short. Any ideas or comments would be wonderful.

Reviews

[tamsin]

Simple, but a great read.
I would love to see more of your things soon.

[Kelsey]

This is so simple, yet so lovely. I really enjoyed it. I hope to read more of your work in the future.

[Danielle]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

[Somebrownnerd]

I really enjoyed reading your poem, i only have a couple of suggestions.

"The sun shines down on the Earth
While people on Earth go back and forth"

Maybe take earth out of the second line and just suffice with "While people go back and forth". I think it helps the flow a little. As far as punctuation, it can be useful for the eyes: Such as the break of a period, the slight pause of a comma, or a mild break with a semi-colon. Overall its a good poem though! Hope to see more posted.

[Danielle]

Thank you for catching that! I wasn't quite thinking at the beginning and did not see that I typed Earth in there for that small stanza twice.

[Danielle]

Also, I am glad you enjoyed it.

[Somebrownnerd]

No problem, I tend to miss things when i get caught up in the moment of writing a poem as well. That's what the community is for though! Looking forward to your next piece.

[Sami Khalil]

Flowers bloom while race cars zoom... Well penned.

[Danielle]

Thanks.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...