Foolish

Why sting with sharp wit ,is there need for all that manly posturing all that swagger craving groping always groping for what’s out of reach a groaning ego in a void of bigger egos ,this tied ladened old system so full of its pride its self importance is it so bad to enjoy your three score years in ten in your own self belief wisdom pleases yet it also entangles us in its desire ,so brush that lie from your eye and shake off all pretence and be naked as a babe and just live.

Reviews

[Rasputin]

I think you accidentally put the poem in the "Author's Note" space. Unless you're trying to make a statement about... something.
In regards to the poem itself, I wouldn't say I actively dislike it, but it's certainly not the most original thing I've ever read. As far as the grammar is concerned, I know that poetry is supposed to exist outside of the traditional "rules" that prose normally adheres to, but this doesn't even read like a poem- it reads like a story with s**t grammar. And there are several misspelled words. Again, I know that poetry shouldn't be judged by textbook standards, but somehow I don't think that the misspellings were done on purpose for artistic sake.
But hey, that's just my opinion.

[khalid]

i can bet this is an invitation to get back to the baby stage, free from every limits and rules...

[Mauricio Montoya]

First thing that came to mind, where the poem, until I read the authors notes.
Great job, well done.