Needles.

A look at the treatments we put our bodies through!

Slack little scars tell tales ought not to be told,

Eyes slit to the need of seeing men through the cold,

Fragile minds kept ignorant of present exclusion,

My stomach leaves pangs of several repulsions.

 

With a needle sharp with speed yet steady,

Takes time for blood to gather and ready,

Bleak moments of gowns hooked up to spire,

Wrinkled women have lost the will for desire.

 

Natural thoughts are stranded on shores of malice,

Every looking for the mythical and sparkling chalice,

A cup of twenty the cards are every true and fair,

Feeble minds stare blank and hopeless with care.

 

Take heed of pure gibberish written perfectly in books,

Never knowing why they stand tall with faint looks,

Break bones if needs be and they will with decree,

Make note my dear sweet friends, you’ll never be free.

Author's Note

Honesty!

Reviews

[Bats In The Belfry]

I enjoyed reading this because its one I can read over and over chewing on it to make sure I didnt miss any of its meaning. "Wrinkled women have lost the will for desire" Its a deliciously thought provoking line...Im trying to figure out how I feel about it...On one hand its sometimes true yet what can they truly do about it. Getting wrinkly is a natural part of life, men tend to look to younger women as a symbol of beauty and it can be a challenge for older women to maintain sexiness and be classy...i dont know...its given me something to ponder...lol

[Tom Cook]

The last stanza packs the punch this poem is trying to get through. Very well written, there's a reason the editors of WnW enjoy your work, Thomas.

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Beautiful piece, and very well written, i also love the last stanza, very creative xxx

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

THanks pet! x

[∂αʌ<..]

reality!
beautiful poetry! :)

[Amila Jay]

Awesome write :))

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

You sure bring reality to life...just what people can end up believing...
great !!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thanks x

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Excellent writing! This is amazing!

[MOON]

Lovely write and true last stanza sums it up beautifully . What written is not necessarily what is , hardly stands up.

[Dayran]

A gradual awakening to the perception of knowing and what consitutes its content. A peek, not much more otherwise it brings an admission that can be cause quite a wreck. It works itself to the confession that others feign a knowledge that has no basis, as a prelude to its own insight into the nature of reality.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

very good points you've made here!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you x