Nero

An ode to the old fiddler.

Tired silence breaks under time and stealth,

A fearful act of cowards make men, men,

Barelled walls steal blood from those few,

The titan stands tall towered when, when.

 

Slayed masters mock bodies between rows,

Guided hands feel forth souls heat, heat,

Women dance with demons in shires close,

Fractured branches fall off quiet neat, neat.

 

Brace a stone and crash wood open along time,

Slack reminders of an earth by hero's, hero,

A city burned bright and hot warming feet,

He danced circles and lines that Nero's, Nero.

Author's Note

Just something quirky that may make you smile.

Reviews

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

The repetition and density of the work does make it stand out, and standing out at times, is what you do best.

The fact that you can take a historical figure and do this with him, well it's just very european and academic of you and such powers of the old fiddle (old bards) are not lost upon me.

[Valentine]

Different but very interesting when read twice..Neat job..Kathie

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Thought it was a bit odd, but it certainly kept my attention. Easy to read and quirky as intended. Clever. Great write!

[obvious pseudonym]

i like that it was easy to read. a lot of poems are just complicated and don't make much sence but this was pretty clear and i like that. i really liked that the words repeated. when it comes too that it's like it was used so much people stopped using it. but i think it adds a nice touch

[x]

interesting, I thought it was thoughtful and a little odd, not in a bad way or anything. I like the subject choice (i went through an ancient history phase)

[Daytonight]

Very well done with great flow, rhyme and form. Keep on penning.

[WindSong]

It is a strong and powerful poem. I like your poetic style, rhyme and rhythm.
The presentation and delivery are quite good. It's a great poem and a pleasure to read.

[Allen Smuckler]

Forgive me, Thomas....but I don't find this all that quirky....
It was extremely entertaining and appears well thought out...
The style, rhythm and rhyme scheme were more than what quirkiness represents to me...your command of the language (and the poem) throughout was always under control and this reader really didn't know where you were heading til the last line...I love the repetitiveness of the words at the end of the lines..it was a great technique for emphasis and explanation.
Excellent write, Thomas
allen
Oh, BTW....It did make me smile :)) see....

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

It may have been done quickley but with great skill as well
it flows and thats the skill of your writting really fast and well worth the time read my friend cheers Gonzo

[swati]

It's quirky yet deep...Loved it!!