cockroach

u know when everything u do reminds u of them? yeah, that

if there is a difference between carefully pulling at a hangnail

and resurrecting our days of honey + hymns

then feel free to tell me abt it

(because my love for u is like a cockroach)

if there is a difference between getting a nosebleed during sex

and laughing w yr ghost while drinking cold coffee

then go ahead and let me know

(because the whole world is yr backwash)

if there is a difference between driving w yr eyes closed on the freeway

and seeing u in every particle of static on my tv screen

then just show it to me

because i'm lodged between yr back molars

and i'm sort of having trouble seeing it

Author's Note

trying out using patterns in my writing instead of just throwing stuff out there

Reviews

[Brandon Wile]

Raw and Poignant, something entrancing about that style. Keep it going!

[JBoone]

Amazing. The imagry is powerful. The style is your unique and authentic voice. It is your pure thoughts. The pattern you used adds to flow and makes this like a song or a chant.

[Z.]

i just keep coming back for this ((this is lyk, the fifth time i read this)) and i loooveee it ur probably one of my fave writers cuz u dont care abt rules and you let everything in ur mind flow without stopping and ur style is so refreshing and so unique and wow.

bless u.

[I Am Svetlana]

"Laughing with your ghost" line was probably my favorite, but hey, this was a very raw & powerful poem! It's hard to let go of someone when you've become so used to having them around. It's like losing yourself...that's the worst way to go. I have the problem of getting too emotionally attached to people sometimes, so I do my best to not "get to know" many so I don't constantly get hurt. I loved the descriptions & comparisons you made! Very great write, keep up the good work!

[Tristin Sky]

This is one is probably my favorite. I love how out there it is and spontaneously odd it is but in a good way. Odd is good keep it up please!

[Beth]

I love the tone and the imagery put across but I have to disagree with the style. It makes it rather difficult to read and disrupts the flow. Words have vowels in them for a reason! Keep up the good work though :)

[Papaya]

Hi Kitty, really enjoyed the dose of bitterness delivered here with your mild sarcastic conversational tone.
You've got a unique voice and style and I really like it a lot! And the cockroach... I have one of those too.
They never die. No matter how many bombs drop. That love lives for better or worse. In my case for worse.

Also, there are some who are really fussy about form and I like that you did your own thing here and ignored those 'rules' because there really should not be any rules. Nice job.

[kitty blur]

Glad that you related to the cockroach concept. :) I almost feel like if I left out the (it never dies) part of the title, people wouldn't really put the idea of perpetual and rather annoyingly resilient love together themselves. Thanks for the compliment on my form, too. I used to get a lot of mixed reactions from it, so it makes me really happy when people on here dig it. :)

[Papaya]

you're welcome and yeah, you'll probably get mixed reactions on the form but i love that you don't care and do it anyway. :)

[gouri]

Entertaining & neat Poetry.
I enjoyed the comparisons beautifully knitted.
Good work, Keep writing

[kitty blur]

Thank you so much. The way that you worded "beautifully knitted" made me feel super cool. :)

[William Liston]

I really love how you write in such an informal style; it really adds uniqueness to your works. As for this poem in particular, I really enjoyed reading it. I could relate to every single line. I especially love how you presented almost random ideas in this poem; it was like the poem reflected your state of mind. Also, I like that you're "trying out using some patterns;" it's good when someone tries to step out of their comfort zone. Great job on this.

-William Liston

[kitty blur]

So happy that you could relate to the lines! One of my fears when I write in this whole informal style is that I won't be understood or be able to get my point across to anyone. Thank you for your review. :) Gives me motivation to keep putting myself out there.