To Blame for the Snake

a poem exploring feelings of guilt about walking away from someone

Your eyes are mournful

Your eyes are mournful

Your eyes are mist-full

Your eyes are mine, still

 

All chills, all chills

This snake of a man beside you

All spills, all spills

 

Your eyes are mist-full

Your eyes are mist-full

Your eyes are wistful

Your eyes are mine, still

 

All spills, all spills

This snake of a man bestride you

All builds, all builds

 

Your eyes are wistful

Your eyes are wistful

Your eyes are mindful

Your eyes are mine, still

 

All builds, all builds

This snake of a man inside you

All fills, all fills

Author's Note

Inspired by, or perhaps interpreted from , the song "Hijomalind" by the band Sigur Rós from their double EP "Hvarf/ Heim".

Reviews

[J.K. (Not Rowling)]

Wow, you definitely understand the power of repetition. The hindsight remorse is evident. I can picture a (ragged) man repeating this into a half empty glass of inexpensive scotch, almost hypnotic. "Your eyes are mine. still" is an eerie yet powerful line. Given a different tone in the poem, this could be what every lover wants to hear. In this context, it's just disarming. I'm consistently amazed by the power of your work.

[Joseph - Michael]

Nope, sorry, never heard of the song...

Other than that, it was pretty unusual how you repeated some few lines, it's like hearing those words becoming louder each time I read the same lines over. It's all good here...

[Alexander W. Quinn]

Never heard of the song, but I like the poem! When I read it, my mind got pulled into it like listening to a witches spell...think "double double toil and trouble", but way cooler obviously.

[AlleyCat34]

very interesting piece here. I like it although I have never heard that song before LOL. very cool melodic rythm to the poem as well! Nice job!