Beach-side lullaby

Something that popped into my head. I might make it longer, but I'm not sure if I want to yet.

Hush child, cry no more
here the morning draws its light

Nearer, nearer on the shore
see the golden sands alight.

Hush child, dry your tears
see the darkness loose its girth

Watch the sun on crests of waves
as day breaks o'er this weary Earth.

Author's Note

Questions, Comments, Critiques, Tell me what you think ~!!

Reviews

[phantomcristal]

*snor* huh oh sorry kitty i fell asleep ... me liky :) hows keely

[Holly Mason]

sometimes less is best and this reads like it is one of those times*)
lovely beach filled words
the words you have laid out read very well with a nice soft whispering flow
thank you for sharing

[Kaitlyn]

: )
Thank you, I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

I think that you're right. I feel like if I made it longer it would be too cluttered. : )

[twain]

Love it, its simple and beautiful, "the golden sands alight" is my favorite line. I like it as it is but if you want to make it longer go ahead, I'd love to read it, but it seems to have ended for me "as day breaks o'er this weary earth".

[Kaitlyn]

: )
Thank you very much. I'm glad that you enjoyed it.