flow

ideas flow out of me like.

 bullets out of a machine gun.

targeting everyone.

fearing noone.

affecting everyone and anyone in sight.

taking over there inner being.

killing them, then bringing them to life again.

profound yes.

taken for granted.

no.

listen to these words i flow.

 

Reviews

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

yes never can be fro granted at all...great expression always takes it all..

[Coyote Poetry]

Good when the words are flowing. I need something to motivate me. Life got too boring. I like the story in this poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Rasputin]

This sounds like a rap.
"Word".

[Southern Cross]

Has the flow and beat of a good rap song.. try adding a chorus

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Enjoyed the large use of figures of speech:
a very nice use of similitude (verse 1-2), and i can see many anthitesis (everyone-none/anyone; killing-bringing to life; profound yes-no).
Good piece, good work :)

[SapphirianVampiress]

Hmm well it was exceptinanly well written. I loved it, it is true in many ways. I think it flowed nicely and really enjoyed reading it. :)

[justice]

flow indeed! haha. I really like the sound of this when read out loud. It flows almost like a rap, but not quite. I still think you hamper yourself with the periods at the end of every line. Experiment with the flow if you do not cap every line. You will open yourself to a whole new world of possibilities. And one minor problem, you used a wrong word! haha. L6 "there" should be "their" :) Thanks for sharing. I really enjoy reading!