Crimson Roofs

A Poem by Randolf Ramos

It took nearly 30's to see this roof

Catalyzed by chemicals; air rain and heat

It took millions of evaporation and condensation,

to finally see the feat.

To finally be allured by such majestic crimson tint

It will take 40 to see it frail

To look at rusted crumbs that fall

Even winds hardly keep it from being unnoticed

To what the rusting roof would tell

It will take 50 to notice a whole

On when the weather would take its toil

The crimson roof that thee once knew

Wither and hardly comparable to once a crimson hue

At 70, No one wanted it fall

That within its roof is a foundation of us all

We will always be free

That it prepared us in way we see.

© 2011 Randolf Ramos

Author's Note

For my parents

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Moonflower

The way that you worded it at times, was throwing me off...especially the first line "It took nearly 30's to see this roof" I didn't really understand what this meant, and couldn't figure out the concept..I'm not sure if its just me, but I think that it could have been worded more obviously, if you're speaking of years than "It took thirty years to see this roof" would be just fine, and would be much less confusing.
Other than that this is a very good piece, very well written and portrayed, I enjoyed the mood and flow.