Skin Deep

Is a burn only skin deep?

Not being careful.

Still not completely my fault.

Accidents happen.

Skin burned red and raw. 

A scar now for a lifetime.

Burning through my arm.

My elbow, useless.

I am an ugly monster.

This cannot be changed.

Pain, unbearable.

Exhausted from the healing.

My body is tired.

Reviews

[TLK]

I like the imagery of the scar still burning. This highlights the intensity of the fire that caused the damage, and also how it continues to be a problem even so long after the accident.
This an intense "in my head" kinda poem. I can't help but wonder how other voices might react if you included them - I hope there are people around you who disagree strongly with the idea that you are an "ugly monster" (assuming the poem is about your own life).

[Kleeson]

It would be a cool idea to add in the other voices from around me, because it is about my life. It happened yesterday and I wrote it yesterday. It was the only way I could deal with it mentally. Thank you so much for you review it meant a lot to me because you were able to 'feel' it even with the lack of adjectives. =)

[b.platte]

ouch. Sounds painful... which means your description was great... and eloquent. I especially liked the part about feeling exhausted from the healing.

[Kleeson]

Thanks! Yea, the last few days I've felt so winded just from being awake. =)

[nigrum homonculus]

the imagery used in this was great. especially the last stanza. i got a large scar taking up a quarter of my right forearm from when i flew off a bike after going over a speed bump after going down a steep hill. so i definitely knew what you meant from that. you wrote this damn well. well done

[Kleeson]

Thank you so much! =)