A Diamond

Unaware and unfazed wanders his gaze,

Falls upon a body obscured with a haze,

Curiously and carefully he digs for examination,

To find a body of  luster and beauty beyond his imagination.

In this vast land covered with dirt,

It's a diamond,

A diamond he's found in the dirt.

It's a diamond,

A diamond he's found in the barren desert.

* * * *

Illuminating the path and banishing the dark,

Sparkling with a similarity so stark,

In it he sees a person,

Carved into someone strong and  decent,

Her intentions nobly innocent,

For she  truly is down to earth,

As hard to find as a diamond in the dirt,

In this modern society with its roots corrupt,

Her modesty stands out,

A flourishing tree in a dying forestry.

 * *

Standing still staring at the object,

The boy reminisces stumbling upon it months ago,

A diamond of immense beauty and glow,

He had decided its safety would be his foremost duty,

It  has been to him, what a candle is to a flame,

It has been to him, what a photo is to a frame,

Standing still in this barren desert of life,

Desolately feeling it could feel back the same.

*

Author's Note

Please do drop in your reviews haha.Took me around a month to write this, the longest a poem has taken lol .Made me realize how hard it is to write about a person without sounding overly descriptive.
Thanks A lot yo

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

We will know and touch few real diamonds in a life.
"Carved into someone strong and decent,
Her intentions nobly innocent,
For she truly is down to earth,"
Sweet and kindness. A rare gift needed to be thankful for. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[JayceeC]

I love the bones of this poem. It's done well. The only technical issues is a double use of the same descriptive in a stanza body/body try body/gift in the first stanza and dirt/dirt try dirt/earth/desert for the second. Other than that the very last line feels off in meaning. While not grammatical incorrect, it does not feel like a true translation of your feelings.
Desolately feeling may not be exactly. If you keep desolately (alone/apart in sadness) perhaps wishing instead of feeling.

Overall, I liked this poem and enjoyed it's "The heart wants what the heart wants" theme. At least this person recognized the value of what he held, many do not.

[Mara]

wow amazing, love the rhyming and the flow
great job:)

[AaronFreitas]

This is awesome Kshitij... sometimes our best pieces take us a while to perfect. Your descriptions are awesome!

[Willard Wells]

You have given her a very high value and you have to hope it is not to much. Very nice.

[Sultrysoul]

I love this. It's is so emotionally drawing. Thank you for sharing.

[wordman]

and a beautiful write it is my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a beauty who is also humble and nice...not easy.

this reminds me of when Romeo first saw Juliet..."for i neer saw true beauty till now"

really expressive piece...