SONNET 101

This is not the one hundred and first sonnet I've ever written, it's the first. The style is Shakespearean, and the title is a reference to Room 101, the interrogation room in Orwell's "1984." 04 12

Miracles hide their realism in
the shelf life of biodegradable
skin threads, a proud feat in light of how thin
it strains to not be seen available
by all who ever wished upon a star
or snuffed a candle in the name of hope.
It knows the sole place where the answers are:
a room of two fiends and a misanthrope.
Blood's twins, seamstresses of judgement's fabric
and the Miss with the guillotine for thread
fetched from the shelf of life in syllabic
shrugs by her sisters, fitters of the dead.

Miracles are cooing one-way changelings
given realism for their playthings.

Reviews

[Belle]

A three quatrain with a rhyme scheme of ABAB CDCD EFEF followed by a couplet ending (which normally summarizes the whole content of the piece) with a rhyme scheme of GG. Syllabic meter is Pentameter ( five foot each line), not quite sure about the accents for I am not really good in Scansion. I can not yet clearly identify Accentual Meter for me to say fairly that it followed the Iambic accentual pattern. But definitely this is a Shakespearean Sonnet--one of the most fascinating form. I AM IMPRESSED!! :))

How funny, when I submitted my Solemn Burn in the Rain poem for book publication I titled it with a SONNET 11 though it was not my eleventh, it was my first actually!

[kublakhan27]

Haha yes I did deviate from the accentual pattern a bit in some places, but in terms of the meter and the rhyme scheme, I was very careful to make sure I got those right, cuz those are essentially the points that define the Shakespearean form moreso than the accents. It took a lot of work to piece it all together but I felt good about it when it was done :) So thank you for the comments, and I'm glad you liked it so much :D

[Belle]

Ah- nah. I thank you for I enjoyed reading this much! :D
Working with form really needs time and amount of patience, but you are so right, the level of blissfulness is totally different when the piece is done. :D... I am thrilled to read more from you!

P.S. I see you are into English Literature.
I am just done reading Molière's Tartuffe which I think you are most familiar with :D :D . It is a play, yes it is supposed to be watch not
read ( LOL) but the theme and the intellectual value is very engaging so I took time to read especially that no staging of this play has been or will ever occurred in my country:)).... Just made me think how'd you find Molière as Shakespeare's contemporary...

[kublakhan27]

:D I'm somewhat embarrassed to say it but even though I've heard much about Moliere I haven't actually read the play, though I certainly intend to look it up now in light of what you've told me...I have no doubt that it is something that will certainly resonate with me :D I've gotten kind of lax with my reading in the last year or so cuz of various issues but I'm slowly trying to catch up now, and this is certainly one of the things I will look for :D I have written a few pieces that are inspired by Shakespeare though...but I would definitely be honoured if you checked out more of my stuff...thanks again for the support and the info :D

[The Random Writings Of ..]

Awe my friend I can see the Shakespearean style flowing from your fingertips as you wrote this. This is incredible to the nth degree! Yes I agree the imagery used in this piece is remarkable and the verbiage is that of an old style, which is hard to pull of, but in your case - of course you have no trouble.
"Blood's twins, seamstresses of judgement's fabric
and the Miss with the guillotine for thread"
These lines I like because i see a reflection of darkness, and the mixture you have used here is uncanny. It is very dramatic, and tragic - which I hope is the place you were going. :) With such a short piece you have given us a world in a looking glass. A trap if you will. Excellence!

[kublakhan27]

:) Like your story, this is a baby of mine so I'm glad you were able to tap into the Shakespearean feel, which really contains all those emotions you mentioned and a few more for good measure :) I MAY have been subconsciously influenced by the mythic Dark Lady of those Sonnets when the Sisters Of Fate appeared in my head. In any event I'm just glad you liked it and considered it a good example of the form. :) I should point out though that this one took a good two or three weeks worth of work to get out, and I nearly threw in the towel on more than one occasion lol

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

I love to work on a piece that is so provoking that you almost give up on it, and when you finish it and it comes out like this, well you have something to be proud of! This is excellent work!

[kublakhan27]

:D I'd love to do more of them at some point but I'm yet to come up with any ideas that lend itself to the form as well as this one did :P

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

Well it's sometimes rare that these come up, a gem diamond in the ruff. So when they come along, we appreciate them more. Because I think they don't come along so easily :) That's what makes them special!

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Great flow and rhytm! Really loving your poems! Keep on writing! 100/100 :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always, that means a lot :D

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You're welcome! :)

[Emma Lee-Riviera]

This is really very well-written. The flow of the rhyme scheme gives it an interesting cadence.

Blood's twins, seamstresses of judgement's fabric
and the Miss with the guillotine for thread
fetched from the shelf of life in syllabic
shrugs by her sisters, fitters of the dead.

These are my absolute favorite lines! Beautiful, my dear. ;)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you for the kind words, I'm glad you like it ;)

[MOON]

Lovely some great imagery . I like the first two line great word choice . I especailly love these lines it strains to not be seen available
by all who ever wished upon a star
or snuffed a candle in the name of hope.
It knows the sole place where the answers are:
a room of two fiends and a misanthrope.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much, I'm glad you like it^^