Nana

This is very personal and emotional poem.

You've left when I was fourteen

why so soon, why so fast

I can't wrap my head around it

Before that I believed in God

Why it sounds so funny now. 

You taught me how to draw a human

Two ovals and all that jazz

you used to love the yellow color

bright as sun as you used to say. 

You used to ask me to do your nails 

I said no almost every time 

I remember burgundy colored nails

You felt so beautful and happy.

Once I wore a little white princess dress

You burst into tears the minute you saw me

I felt the prettiest girl alive 

Sadly, you won't make me feel this way again. 

Reviews

[Chris]

This one... hurts because the understanding of loss is complete.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!!
heartfelt personal......and filled with love........
a beautiful dedication........she would be proud of you.........
the little details......hinting the depths of emotions.......
i won't say with time everything will be okay.......its impossible to deal with a personal loss in a alleged mature way.........but that's how life is........we can't turn the time back but we can certainly look forward to what's to come.........best wishes.......

great poem.....
absolutely loved it!!!!

[Gabija]

thank you.

[ranscan]

As presented a very personal and emotional piece. It is a fine representation of the theme, the remembering of one now gone, the pain still present, yet with time the memories of the relationship more poignant.
The flow is good, some well developed language leading to well placed high points. Good imagery and emotional communication, the tenses handled easily.
I am going to suggest that instead of drew you might try draw. In the next line yellow colors plural or the color yellow if singular. Into instead of inyo (typos, I know I hate when I do that to). Though I am not a fan of capitol letters for every line, its a choice one can make, however here its not quite uniform.
A few small errors, none of them are fatal to the enjoyment of your work. And you should be proud of this poem, it has some great qualities, it balances the emotions involved in loss, the little intimacies of important relationships, and tells a story with intent.

[Gabija]

wow. I love reviews as long as this one hah thank you

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

This is very personal and emotional poem and so does it sounds so nice to readers :)

[Gabija]

thank you :))