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I waited.

 

I waited for you to say
Something,
Anything to make me stay.
But you just stood and let me
Walk away.

 

Your eyes showing

Nothing but a gentle sense of shame,

Your body language speaking

What you would not let yourself say.

But still you let me walk away,

You let me walk away.

 

I run.

 

I run from all our memories

From all the pain

Your shame causes me.

Why can't you just see

Why didn't you just see...

 

All I wanted was right here

In your arms,

Your heart,

But you couldn't open up enough

To just let me be.

You couldn't love me as me...

 

I fall.

 

But I cannot get back up,

My heart is binding me,

Even now I cannot be

The same.

I will never be the same,

Because of how you made me change,

You made me change.

 

I dissapear.

 

Never to be found again,

The girl I was,

The woman I wanted to be,

Buried inside of me,

Buried...

 

For love of you.

For your hate of me.

Will you remember

Back when I was still

Everything I always strived to be?

Will you throw away our memories

And pretend to never notice me again?

 

 

 

If there's only one thing left to say

I'll tell you something, dear,

I'll whisper in your ear

Everything will be okay again....

I will be okay.

 

Author's Note

to really get a feel for the beat i was going for, go to this website and listen to "Don't ever Change".
http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=user.viewprofile&friendID=136323309

this is a similar beat to the one for these lyrics.

Reviews

[Kevin Andros]

Altogether, a nice composition. But I thought that the thought was kinda stretched and you have tried to elongate your thoughts and expression in a bad manner which left few stretch marks all over the peice, particularly in the beginning. The start is good: - "I waited". The following paragraph is also well written, but the para following that first one feels a little bit out of place. The same can be said for the 2nd para on the coloumn you said - "I run".

But you have continued beautifully and have made it up for your flaws and making this peice worth reading. The feel is nice, just a bit stretched as I would say again.

I don't want to sound rude or mean or anything like that, just I want you to know the true picture it presented to me. It is all according to my point of view, after all. You can just eliminate those paragraphs, or else mend them. But you have ended this peice on a winning note: -

If there's only one thing left to say

I'll tell you something, dear,

I'll whisper in your ear

Everything will be okay again....

I will be okay.

Symbolising the hope that a human heart holds. for anything. And there is a saying, "All's well that ends well".

Altogether, A good peice of work. I will say that again. ~KA~

[Jennifer P]

lovely