Internally Bleeding

Whetted glass whirls in my stomach,

Originating from a splintered heart;

As it desperately pumps blackened blood

Containing miniature, honed shards.

 

Even more inflicted pain is brought

With every twisted smile;

Ripping my mind to shreds with

Internal razors twistered by a gale.

 

At last internal wounds

Evolved into external bleeding;

Dripping out my wrists is neither crimson,

Nor blue; but instead black ink.

Author's Note

Just a little something before I leave for a few hours/days. I will definitely have more by the time I get back. I know it isn't good; but at least it's something.

Reviews

[demureminds]

Your imagery is great in this! You are too hard on yourself! I enjoyed this, it was very dark and grim, but exposes truthful emotions.

[Freckled Princess]

Blackened blood...
Wow.
Visual's are amazing. I love it.

[Rox Bain ☮]

"As it desperately pumps blackened blood
Containing miniature, honed shards"
I don't know why... but for some reason, these lines sent shivers down my spine...
:O What do you mean, "I know it isn't good; but at least it's something"?!?!?!?!?!
It is good. In fact, it is AMAZING :)

[Tai Ryens]

If you want amazing, check out my poems "Drowning" and "Illusions." This does not even compare to those two; or at least in my eyes.

[eeoopig]

Yep it isn't good...it's great! This very very deep and dark, and the flow was brilliant :D

[Lost in Wonderland]

Dang this poem was so raw and dark and deep. Awesome job! The second stanza really spoke to me, this whole poem just contained so much truth and emotion. Great work

[Baby Ricochet]

Wow. That was some heavy s**t dude. Are you sure you're thirteen? When I was that age all I wanted to do was look at girlie pictures and play basket ball.

[Michael G.]

Good flow to this one, Ryan. Good work.

[stars are far]

that was so great :)
keep it up ;)

[Thomas Reilly Thornhill]

I like it