Unfamiliar

Will my leaves ever grow again?

Rotting leaves shrivel

from olden branches;

similar to falling petals

of what was once in bloom.

Browning foliage splicing

into flurrying memories;

whiffing apart from languishing

bark.  Perhaps crimping skin.

 

Leaf by leaf, every

petal falls into oblivion:

until neither corroding wood

nor moldering epidermis

is familiar to faces in the mirror.

Author's Note

I do feel as if I had been quite vague when writing this (I did have a certain mental illness in mind when reading this), so if anybody could recognize what I speak of; feel free to phrase it below. I am curious to see if I was slightly too vague when doing this.
One more thing, I'd like some constructive criticism on this; as I am attempting a somewhat new writing style. If you do so, I thank you kindly.

Reviews

[Rhea752]

well done. great word choice!! Alzheimer's? ..... just a guess. :P

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

Alzheimer's ............. ?

[Tai Ryens]

Actually, Dementia, but they are vaguely familiar.

[pumpkin head]

such amazing imagery, Powerful read i enjoyed

[Legolas]

Great poem. The imagery is wonderful. Perhaps it is Alzheimer's? Anyways, good job.

[Tai Ryens]

Close: Dementia. Hehe, thanks.

[Legolas]

Ahh. Right.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the way you use the language. Using words to make your point that are strong. I had to read the poem a second time for powerful statements and good visions create by your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tai Ryens]

I thank you kindly~

[Dr. Wood ?]

I might be wrong...I usually am...I cannot write with depth. I simply saw this as oncoming age and how it irrevocably alters us...Even if I am wrong...I still enjoyed it. It is good to experiment, I do not do it half as much as I should and by the look of this not half as good as you do...well done

[Tai Ryens]

You are somewhat right, but forgetting to mention the metaphors of 'leaves and petals.'
Regarding experimenting: I'm sure you write just as skilled as me (in my eyes, far more skilled), but it isn't too necessary to experiment if you already feel comfortable within your style. I alter among many styles, simply because none of them seem to anchor me down long enough; if that makes sense.
Thanks for reading . . .

[Dr. Wood ?]

well thanks for that...I DO feel very comfortable doing the kids stuff with humour and all...I think I'll stay in my comfort zone..thanks

[Tai Ryens]

If you feel comfortable writing for kids and humoring them, just as Dr Seuss and many writers have, then I do say: strive to improve your humor. Tap into your 'inner child' and unleash playful melodies, hehe.

[Dr. Wood ?]

doing that thing right NOW