Anchors

Drowning, except without the dying . . .

I would cross oceans for you;

which I did regarding the cuts

blistering my aching palms from

the miles I held onto your chain;

swiftly following in pursuit of your ship

{which so recently has anchored

its stay in my splintered soul; frightening

away piranhas that so often have

devoured the angelfish who dare to

bask in corroding gardens of coral

long rotten by the darkness in my soul}

Ironically; you pulled me by anchor

through seas of my own tears; jetting

me through thrashing tsunamis formulated

by tornadoes shredding my innards;

whipping rain through bloodshot eyes

{in addition, I gaped and smiled as

you got drunk off scarlet gashes on my

wrists}

Author's Note

I do apologize for my teenage ranting; but I felt as if I needed to get this out . . .
Photo courtesy of CorrsollaRobot in Deviant Art

Reviews

[Kristin]

LOVES IT even if it is "teenage ranting" it was written perfectly

[demureminds]

Your teenage ranting was well penned! Great portrayal of darkness, it doesn't even really sound like ranting because it's written with such profound language, vocabulary, and structure. Great work!

[Tai Ryens]

I originally had a third stanza in which my, err, protagonist bargains his soul to the devil; though I felt it did not fit in with the rest of the concept.

[Gothic Girl]

your poems all have the same theme: death, sadness, etc. i do like your writing. this one, for example, really showed vivid images. especially the ones you put inside the "braces { }". great work again, Tai.

[Tai Ryens]

I did go a bit (kind of under-exaggerated) overboard with the brackets . . .

[Gothic Girl]

haha lol.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Though I dn't self harm, I could relate to alot of the emotions to this, almost brought me to tears at a poit (probablly would have if I wasn't as tired). Very well done Tai! I loved the metaphor, this was a very strong piece indeed
God Bless
~Mickey

[Tai Ryens]

That means a lot, I thank you kindly.

[Lost in Wonderland]

No problem at all

[Serena Kaye]

I really enjoyed this.c:

[Twistedme]

Nice use of words in your meanings though I thought you used to many....the use of your brackets was a bit to much aswell (you put nearly half the poem into one lol) but overall I like the way you explain this feeling, good job bob...

[Baby Ricochet]

"bask in the corroding gardens of coral." Cool. Good one.