The Suicidal's Dance

Dance along with suicide and join the damned~

Sweet cyanide is injected from a syringe;

burning ecstasy jolting through frozen veins:

agonizing relief provided by Hades singe;

encouraging a laugh that is oh, so insane.

Or perhaps the rope tickling my throat

will enlighten my life no matter how hard I persist:

nevermore owning a hefty husk to tote

scarred by gashes from where a devil licked my wrists.

{Lovely day for ascension into heaven, is it not?

that is, until the hurricanes suddenly clouded the skies:

is this form of departure absolutely what I sought?

chasing a heaven concealing its lies?}

Eternal frolicking is now engraved into my bones;

stomping on flames is quite the deceitful sight:

more so that I do not trample candles alone;

attracting plenty more prey to dance forever with the light.

Author's Note

One of the rare occasions I write something neither appealing or worthy of junk in my eyes~ Critiques?
Photo courtesy of tsigtoe on Deviant Art

Reviews

[Lost in Wonderland]

Very well done, dark and full of imagery

[Twistedme]

This is all potato and gravy ...

[Tai Ryens]

Sounds delicious!

[Twistedme]

Indeed.

[demureminds]

Your writings are always so dark, but for some reason it never depresses me, which I think is a good thing! You're excellent at portraying feelings through your words, making the sad emotions almost beautiful, rather than a disgusted distortion of grim times. Great work.

[Tai Ryens]

You must have something cheering you up if these don't depress you; they depress me when I write them. Well, then again everything depresses me (I'm not even exaggerating).

[demureminds]

Haha I just find beauty in darkness as well as light especially if they're written with skill.

[afra]

i love it ...well done

[Baby Ricochet]

Baby Ricochet's got something the devil can lick. First two stanza's are pretty cool Tia. That doesn't mean the last two blow though. It's all good baby

[Aehr]

its amazing!!! and it is appealing all right!

[Rox Bain ☮]

Not appealing?! Seriously?!

To be honest, this blew my mind. I love the language you use and your writing technique. It's so refined, but at the same time, so natural...

[Tai Ryens]

The way I see it: too many conjunctions, not refined enough, such overused concepts, yadda yadda yadda . . .

[Rox Bain ☮]

You're crazy :P
It's amazing :)