Stolen

I swiped your soul for the improving of mine.

Bits of your flesh still lick my taste-buds,

whispering forgotten hymns,

and breaths

to be inhaled nevermore

had only my dentures been transparent,

maybe you could have spotted

the filth, the cavities

that sprawled across my

sparkling teeth,

or

perhaps,

you would have

been too

head-over-heels in love

to notice

nonetheless,

your bitter aroma

still coincides with

my nostrils,

courtesy of your

agonized heart,

lacking

of a shell to

control

within my pocket

and my fist

clenched firmly

around it

ironic,

how you thought

you were special,

when I am certain you

were not,

though,

I do owe my soul

to you in a way,

for I've swiped yours

for the improving of mine

Author's Note

Photo courtesy of Christine-Muraton of Deviant Art.

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Love the first stanza. Classic Tai metaphor that hints at cannabalism. THis is another brilliant Tai poem. My lad you're back on top of your game. Outstanding!

[Tai Ryens]

Kudos for having spotted my reference and inspiration for this poem.

[That_Girl]

"had only my dentures been transparent,
maybe you could have spotted
the filth, the cavities
that sprawled across my
sparkling teeth" I envy how you can use simple, everyday words that one wouldn't usually associate with such darkness (besides filth, naturally). You do it well. If that made any sense.

One thing though, the font is so f*****g small lol. I had to get my glasses and zoom the screen to read... may want to tweak that. Just a suggestion. :)

[Tai Ryens]

My apologies, as I have a (I estimate) 14-inch laptop screen and it seems in fact a bit too large. I enlarged it a bit, hoped that help.
And yeah, it makes sense. Thanks, I have a tendency to look upon everything a tad bit too dark. I'm not sure if that's either a perk, or a flaw.

[That_Girl]

Not a problem hun, it looks much better. :)

Well, it definitely makes your poetry kickass... whether that helps you any in real life though... may be a different answer haha