Just Rest

Darling.

 Lay your weary head,

    Lay your weary head to rest. 

I shall comfort you in the arms of I,

  While you take your last breath.

Relax your mind, let go...

  Drift off into your dreams.

Heed attention to me, 

  It's not as bad as it seems.

Author's Note

I don't have a name for this yet, it just came to me, aha. I managed to get this on paper before it drifted off, aha, it gave me shivers. It's kind of dark, if you grasp the meaning of it. Enjoy, and thanks for reading ~

ps. I intended for the second and third line to repeat.

Reviews

[Bluefire]

This made me think of how Rue died in "The Hunger Games."
Only it also made me think of two lovers, one drifting into eternal sleep while laying in the other's arms.
Well done!

[Tai Ryens]

Now that I think about it, it sort of does. Hmn . . . Thank you!

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[demureminds]

This seems more peaceful than dark. The narrator's support for the character is also quite endearing. Lovely piece.

[Tai Ryens]

I did intend a soothing aroma to this poem; but only because this is how I portray whatever deity ruling the nether will tempt us to walk in.

[The Scholar]

I feel like this would be so creepy if it were in a book and the one holding the dying person was the one who killed her. Brrrrrrr...!

Great poem, as always. :)

[K-mo]

a very chilling piece, very well written, and very good

[Heather Anne]

Really well written i love the way it takes a second or 2 to grasp the full meaning.

[Thea]

Aw...I was surprised once I got the idea of this poem...This is really creative and brilliant. Might be short but still amazing! Well done, Tai!
:)))

[Michael G.]

Well written piece.
Good solid content and thought in this.
Well done, Ryan.

[Jed Sabffle]

The true meaning of this piece just occurred to me when i read the line, "While you take your last breath"
I love the calmness that envelops this poem
Nice write! Thanks for sharing! :)

[Summer'sBreeze]

Wow Tai, once I grasp the meaning to this it really sent chills down my back.
So much comes to mind when I read this, and I must say "Well done!" :)