Explosions In The Mind's Eye

All of the incredible feelings you feel about your significant other :)

 

Darling, if only you could see what I see

You would bear witness galaxies of stars and planets colliding upon sheer impact in a breathtaking collision when your eyes take hold of mine

My Love, You would behold the passionate spark of a thousand sunsets burning brightly over the horizon of my eyes when they are graced with your charming smile

You would remain in awe of the rays of sunlight that warmly blanket my porcelain skin as I experience the sensations of your touch

Your eyes would pierce the vision of shooting stars showering all around us as the shades of aurora borealis engulf us when your lips sincerely happen upon mine

Oh Darling, if only you could feel the intensity of your luring acts of captivation upon my heart

You would experience the waterfall of desire cascading down in symmetrical, rhythmic beating to match that of my anxious heart whenever you are near

You would conceive that the rarity of our admirable connection surpasses that of a dazzling four- leaf clover amongst a field of dreary green

My Dear, you would savor every moment of our love as if it were a precious flower, thriving and blooming from the roaring thunder and gentle breeze of our eternal affection

You would envision the elegance of blinding lightning shot down from the depths of the moon to dance balleticly across the sky when my hand is found in yours

You would foresee the rainbow formed by every drop of passion bestowed upon me from the chambers of your heart, raining melodically from your lips

My Darling, if only you knew

Author's Note

Reviews are always welcomed! But please don't tell me to shorten it. I can't. Hahah :)

Reviews

[William]

You have a strong vocabulary; I sense a certain ability to string pretty words together in a pleasing way which is utterly lacking in most of the writing I read these days. This is poetry. You've created a beautiful product--the ability to do so is something rare and lovely. Don't lose it.

[Chris Yip]

A blissful charming love poem. Very pleasant to read and as usual well expressed!!
I wouldn't change anything about this well written poem. Great stuff!! Hope you can continue to read my work too. Thanks. : )

[Adora.xo]

This was breathtaking. My favorite like:
"My Love, You would behold the passionate spark of a thousand sunsets burning brightly over the horizon of my eyes when they are graced with your charming smile"

That was genius. I'd like to give you something constructive but there really is nothing you can do. It is beautiful! I must say, I'm a tad jealou with your description :P! Superb job!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Absolutely beautiful words of love..........

[eatmills]

I can't say anything right know to busy picking up my jaw off the floor in awe.

[THIS ACCOUNT IS CLOSED]

Raining Melodically from your lips------- Absolutely priceless........

[reflectingus]

Wow, this is amazing, and really expressive! :)

[Aella.lives]

Captivatingly beautiful and lovely. Lovely write!!

[DESTROYA]

Beautiful! This brings me to a heavenly place. Very serene, yet passionate.

[Lucas Grasha]

In short, you're damn talented.

You assuredly seem to know what you're doing in terms of line structure and what stanzas should include and how your thoughts are arranged in both.

The caliber of the imagery I need not expound upon; it speaks for itself.

With you not including punctuation (as regards to periods) such a thing may set off certain people when they review your work, but with the way you organized your stanzas and lines, you made going without punctuation work extraordinarily well.

Continue doing what you're doing because it's working.