Conjoined Twin

Thoughts on my yesterday

It's the shackles that chained
Shamed and chafed my skin
Motionless moments of hindsight
That told me when to begin
This rhythm and rhyme type
Of vision veiled in sin
Blinded eyes in amnesia
Led by demons within
Are we broken molds of the forgotten
Memories we let disappear
Placed knee deep in this mire
How long have we been here

Reviews

[Lost, n'MT]

Mastered the flow, commanded the rhyme, and forcing the reader to want to seek answers for questions we may never have even thought to ask.

"Are we broken molds of the forgotten
Memories we let disappear"

The realism and mystery behind this is impeccable, and really leave you wondering what we really are... those two lines really spoke the loudest to me and has me wondering so many questions that never have crossed my mind before... Remarkable.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, im glad that you enjoyed it. This style of writing, the rhyme technique and flow, are what comes to me most of the time and if I want a different style I have to struggle to write differently. With this one, i embraced it. Thank you again for reading and leaving a review.

[Lost, n'MT]

That's great to hear because this is such an enjoyable style to read and write. Glad to hear you embraced it, this is by far my favorite style. I'm just as thankful to have had the opportunity to read all the pieces that you've shared as you are in showing your thankfulness, appreciation, and humility in regards to my responses and reviews. Pleasure to have crossed paths with you, hope to read more and hope to begin writing again myself this summer. You didn't need to respond to everything I wrote, but I appreciate that you did and I am happy you've shared as much as you have from your poems to the responses. A true privilege and absolute pleasure, thank you.

[J3ssInJupit3r]

I love how this flows so perfectly. When you read poetry, you shouldn't be stopping and stuttering, your poetry is so fluent and smooth that anyone, stutter or not, could read this out loud effortlessly. I also loved how you continued the rhyming scheme the whole way through, really hooking technique.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I really appreciate it! Most often, I don't have a choice to write this way. Even when I intentionally try and not rhyme and not have a rhythm in there, it starts to sneak in and change up the whole thing. Nowadays I just let it take over and write itself lol

[outspoken1234]

I understood the poem you wrote it very clearly and descriptively thank you

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you for reading and leaving a review

[outspoken1234]

you are very welcome

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

This is a good piece written in a clear-cut and concise manner. Pretty good choice of words. Well-written. Keep writing.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I appreciate it

[Philip Muls]

I love the wording but I am not sure I get the meaning of the whole...what do you mean with the tag Thoughts on my yesterday ?

[LapseOfMind]

The poem is a reflection upon my thoughts and actions from the day before

[Anna]

This was very interesting, I really liked it.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much