Something's Coming Over

I like music.

Take me and watch
I surrender, you see
This mountain of rubble
My walls asunder
It's not that I drift
But your tame gravity
With delicate fingers
That guides me under
On the lips of the wind
I choose to live
And with only a glance
I'm held aloft in your wonder
Such a thin thread
This noose that I need
Your beautiful voice
A stumbling thunder

Reviews

[Tiffany K Charles]

I wish that I could give you a higher rating..... But an 100 is all they have but I'll give you a 1000 for super awesome poetry!!!!!! I loved every letter of it.....

[LapseOfMind]

Oh wow, thank you very much! I truly appreciate the praise and I only hope that when I get back to writing I'll be able to continue to write works that you enjoy

[PoeticSorcery]

very descriptive and thought provoking.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I appreciate it

[Celie Rose]

I really enjoyed your poem. There is a mist of eloquence in your writing. It is beautifully written and well expressed. Keep writing.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Surrender and commitment to boundless love. Many masterful lines here.

[LapseOfMind]

I really appreciate that, thank you

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

You earned the praise, It's my pleasure.

[Rashi Jain]

Beautifully written💕
Keep writing💗

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I will!

[Philip Muls]

Such a thin thread.This noose that I need.

Great phrase. Sounds to em like a very fragile person who is at the mercyu of whatever is coming over.

Well done.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I appreciate it

[Lost, n'MT]

Excellently written, gut-wrenchingly felt.

"But your tame gravity" really jumped out to me, but the last four lines took this to another level. Very well done and deeply felt.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I'm glad that you enjoyed it

[Rasha Bear]

Really beautiful read, keep up the good work.!

[LapseOfMind]

I appreciate it, thank you very much