Paper Thin Skin

Something I held for the briefest of moments but was taken

If this were any other motion, I'd let it die inside skin
But I feel it so clear, and fear what comes from within
And they come in droves, distraction from what I am
To kill all that is genuine, insistent hologram
Where did that breath go, that kept me so still
It seems to be in vain, that search for what's real
And no expression I know, could allow for this shame
When shown through a mirror, all this waste that I claim
No writer of words, no philosopher's mind
Could ever express, that which I cannot find
So deep in this place, stymied thoughts held in speech
Yet still I ache for, a feeling that I can't reach

Reviews

[ReedWrite]

Very nice. I can feel the angst and inner battle in these words. I love the line: Yet still I ache for, a feeling that I can't reach. That sort of sums it up. Love the intensity and voice of this piece.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I really appreciate it. And yeah, I agree, that final line does sum up the whole thing

[Kathy Van Kurin]

LapseofMind,
Oh how complex the human soul. It seems humanity in general is just designed to always be looking for ways to deal with the battles of life. Many of which we may manufacture for ourselves. Emotion is what makes us alive but also can be difficult. Very thought provoking piece for me. Blessings to you as life is walked. Kathy

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you and yes, I believe we were designed to go through the negative. If life is about living then we must live through it all

[Celie Rose]

Enjoyed reading your poem.
Words flowed nicely together.
Rhyming style is very good.
Especially liked these lines:
And they come in droves, distraction from what I am
To kill all that is genuine, insistent hologram
Well written and expressed. Keep writing!

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, i really appreciate it

[Gee]

A deep longing, for what I know not, is evident here. An easy read with good rhyming. Sweet

[LapseOfMind]

Indeed, longing for something that some would deem trivial yet to me was more important than most things. Thank you for reading and commenting, I appreciate it

[Anthony Wayne]

I like this poem, it flows well and I enjoy your rhyming style. It's mysterious and makes me curious to read more of your work. Well done!

[LapseOfMind]

Awesome, happy that you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading it and leaving a review

[Tiffany K Charles]

nice rhythm scheme.... It's almost dark and gory yet simple sad .... Very well written

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much :)

[Jade]

This is really so good. I enjoyed reading this

[LapseOfMind]

Awesome, happy that you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading and reviewing

[PoeticSorcery]

very descriptive yet still kinda mysterious in a way, which I find interesting.

[LapseOfMind]

I'm glad that you found it interesting, thank you for reading and reviewing

[PoeticSorcery]

that's what we're there for, if we didn't read each other, why bother being here, right? :)

[LapseOfMind]

Very true!