Lovers

the creases

and the folds

and wrinkles

of the blankets collapsed

into one another

like

valleys and mountains

ponds and rivers

and

they waited for

the two naked bodies

to destroy

the

terrain

Author's Note

Opinions opinions? :) Comment anyone, please please!

Reviews

[Relic]

That's a great comparison and the metaphor can be seen clearly. Nice.

[Alyssa Case]

Oh wow that was so cute! It was so simple and short and sweet.

[bobc]

l...this is only the second piece of yours I've read, but you seem to have a sure hand with what you called 'free time'. Like this one, too. The brevity is fresh...thanx...bobc

[Jwakefield]

I like the personification of the blankets! Destroy the terrain, awesome :)