Chest Pains

I can feel the hot pain in my chest

I feel the buildup of tears

I can see my life is a quite a mess

And I can see I've wasted my years

I wish I had a scapegoat,

but I haven't a thing to blame

No dictator pushing me around

Not even a disease of the brain

I can feel the tension in my ribs

soreness from clenching my jaw,

'cause I'm still searching for the reason

why I am not happy enough

-l.r.

Author's Note

-l.r.

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Reviews

[Kleio13]

I like the bit of rawness in this poem about how much you want to be happy.

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you, I appreciate your review.

[ron]

Very nicely written. You show passion and feeling in so few words. I injoyed this one very much.

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.

[bookworm0812]

Oh my god, stop being such a good writer! You're so mature for 15, and I don't know how you do it! It's so gorgeously flawless to read, and it reads smoothly. You don't leave your reader with a lot of questions, and you don't need to have a lot of background information to read it all the way through. You leave me with a greater IQ level, which is excellent, your grammar and spelling and everything are intriguing on its own, and when you pair it with such exquisite writing, it really works out well. I'm glad I got into reading your stuff, because it is amazing!

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you so much!

[bookworm0812]

You're welcome very much.

[Laminators Dubai]

omg,you, yess you girl just hijack my brain and heart too.lol
great,
ture,
pure,
and,
great for this lonely little girl.

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you, I'm happy you could relate to my writing

[Laminators Dubai]

Relate is a small word. hey are you on fb?

[Lexi Richard]

Yep, if you wanna talk I can message you my link?

[Laminators Dubai]

ooh i love to, https://www.facebook.com/harshita.ratawal.3
bye.

[Wolfwind]

The way you have woven this piece together is fantastic. Your words capture that pain and uncertainty that comes with musing upon the past mistakes and the unknown questions of the future. Like a walk down memory lane while wondering where the corner in life shall turn.
I think it was the second stanza that was the most powerful for me. It really jerks a person back to reality and that can hurt. Realizing that where we stand in the now is the sum of our own choices, bad or good.

Thanks for sharing your ink! This was really good.
Aaron

[Lexi Richard]

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you!