90 Knives

When it happens

I'm gone - I'm out of my head

I suffocate within

a sea of oxygen

And I don't miss who I've been

I don't miss what I've done

I wish I hadn't damaged

the one I should've most loved

I have not much to say

and too much to hide

I am simply waiting

for the turn of the tide

And with 90 knives in my back

I still smile with care

but I wish that I knew

why I had put them there

-l.r. 

Reviews

[Kiana]

Really beautiful poem.
"I suffocate within
a sea of oxygen
And I don't miss who I've been"
These lines have to be my favorite.
Can't wait to read more from you! :) x.

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you so much!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Congratulations with your first place in the contest, Lexi. :) Rudi

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you, Rudi!

[E.L. Debbage]

'I have not much to say - and too much to hide' - this is my favorite line, so simple yet so powerful. I feel I can connect with this poem and that is so important, you are v talented x

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you so much.

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Wow! It was amazing! So sad but good at The Same Time!
Keep on writing because you have Talent!

C. Lee Battaglia

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you so much!

[Bacon]

This is like...really dark. Like what on earth? Whatever. Constructive criticism right?

[Lexi Richard]

That's the point. Poetry is simply to convey emotions - it doesn't always have to be all smiles and happiness.

[Kelsey Ann]

I love your writing style. You seem to write from the heart and I appreciate that. Great piece! :-)

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you so much!

[Perkele.7885]

I like the poem, I know that it took talent to write the poem. I think I understand the concept of the poem. I do not understand the 90 knives?

[Lexi Richard]

It just means that I've been "stabbed in the back" that many times (not that I've been betrayed 90 times, I just thought that '90' flowed well with the poem). I hope that clarifies it a little better, and thank you.

[Perkele.7885]

It does indeed. Ninety is such a incredibly large number of betrayals!

[closed]

This is heavy...

I wonder if most people in this scenario feel this way in the midst

Good wordplay
It really brings the poem to life


-Dream

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you.