A Perfect Love

flowing softly before my very eyes,

and me not sure whats going on,

and then it hits me like a rolling train,

this is how a perfect love takes shape.

 

long silky lumonous hair eyes full of love,

and compassion for this weary soul,

a face soft as a new fallen snow,

looking in my direction,bringing me on,

showing me how a perfect love takes form.

Reviews

[Paladin4life]

Wow man I have to say its depth surprises me. I had no idea you could write like that. I enjoyed the imagery. I am impressed with your usage of simile. I know this is your first piece on here, but tell me is it your fist venture in to the world of writing at all? I would like to make a suggestion to you in reference to your poem. I think this is a wonderful start but a topic as deep and as large as a perfect love taking form, I think it should be longer. Keep working on this piece and add a little as you learn more of what is means to have that kind of love. Wonderful job Jay. I enjoyed it and look forward to reading your future additions to this piece as well as the other posts I am sure you will add in time. God bless and I will see you later man.

[Erica]

Oh Jay! It is a lovely poem, I like it!