Mystification

Mystification

A Poem by life_seeker
"

Cry of a bewildered soul

"

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Every time I blink

I feel  the moisture

Encircling not just the cores of my eyelids

But my entire manifestation

It would always remain a dampness

A tear cannot escape

It always waits

For an embrace

Many a time I speculate

Am I the only one to hold my fire

When the energy that is contained in me

Threatens to explode

I am confused

Why should I restrain myself

It is not pain that engulfs me

I never feel it

It is the love

That makes me vulnerable

The secrets that are open

Lie randomly in walls and streets

I smell love and blood emanating

From these hidden mysteries

Everything seems connected and separate at once

Why is this I do not know.

© 2012 life_seeker


Author's Note

life_seeker
An outburst of feelings

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This poem is ridiculously emotional. Not as in: Oh, this is ridiculous, but more like: Wow, my heart started beating faster reading it. It's like being at the top of a hill and going down, gaining speed as you reach the bottom, and tumbling to a halt with the sudden realization that there's another hill in front of you.
Most excellent, dear.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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NeHa,
For your last line... Neither does anyone else.
(Don't fall for their lies... the answers are all inside you.)
Vol

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thank you for your review on my poem, your poem is awesome too! I'm glad we all get to use this platform as a creative outlet for what we feel deep inside. Don't hesitate to reach out for help if these feelings become hard to manage on your own.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh my god I freaking love this!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is ridiculously emotional. Not as in: Oh, this is ridiculous, but more like: Wow, my heart started beating faster reading it. It's like being at the top of a hill and going down, gaining speed as you reach the bottom, and tumbling to a halt with the sudden realization that there's another hill in front of you.
Most excellent, dear.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely work

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neha,

Your poem is so intensely emotional and so well written that I can feel the pain. Great job. Not every writer can convey emotion in a manner such as you.

Would you consider changing your last line to: 'Why this is I do not know.'?

Just my interpretation not a criticism.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem.

Sincerely, Cecil

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

life_seeker

13 Years Ago

ha ha thanks a lot
I wrote this in an informal manner so don't suited my flow. But you are ri.. read more
CecilA

13 Years Ago

I believe the rhythm is better. Great job. If you celebrate Christmas, have a joyous one filled with.. read more
beautiful , and deep really ...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well done.
I sympathize with the broken woman lying beside the water. You convey her emotions wonderfully.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on December 23, 2012
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Hi I am new to your world of writers. I write about my experiences, feelings and love to read other related works. more..