your eyes

In your eyes
I saw everything
that I ever wanted to be
 

In your eyes
I saw all that I ever needed to be

but then your eyes turned from me ...
and when your eyes closed to me

 

my heart ...
closed too

Author's Note

I humbly thank friends on this site for giving me the confidence to post here...
thank you

Reviews

[AK]

Again, you have thoroughly bundled it all up with an economy of words that is remarkable. Beautifully done. Where have you been hiding?

[Emily B]

How have I never read this?

I wonder that someone with your understanding found yourself so deeply in someone else's eyes.

But what deep sorrow and loss you make me feel.

[emz]

I love this poem.. its so simple yet in a few short lines you tell a whole story... thanks for sharing x

[Bella-Bea]

I love it.
:)
Why would you be worried about this? It's amazing!

[Anna]

This is wonderfully written! A beautiful touching little piece! A pleasure to read I shall look forward to reading more of your work!

[Sarah]

This is beautiful, no need to feel hesitant about posting! :) I love the symbolism of the eyes closing to represent this person leaving you. Very nice write!

[James K. Blaylock]

This seems like such a sad write, and to me it appears to be about when ones lover, sadly takes another.

jkb