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Wide horizontal strokes from a thick dipped fat bristle brush
Not bending to the lightest of pressure
Simply splattering cloud patterns in furiously setting sun
Masking the shining glory in reflective ripples of running light
creating shapes and forming shadow wisps of imaginary beings
as all the colors shine in shimmer blends of burning time
Shared by two tied souls of loving trust
Sipping slowly as the scene unfolds
In yet another champagne sunset

Reviews

[Narnie]

I like tongue twisters, haha. I love the alliteration in this and have read it aloud... Mimesis is a new word for me Donald... mimicking the landscape through art or literature. You have encapsulated Mimesis here and used it to full extent whilst also drawing the comparison with a long-term loving relationship. Beautiful.

[Vanessa Whiteley]

I love the way you paint the sunset with your words and the soft, romantic tone created through the extensive use of sibilance but I'm not so keen on 'furiously setting sun' because 1) I believe adverbs should be avoided. 2) It sounds and reads like a tongue twister.