Evening sky

Is she simply carrying entire sorrows of today

Is  she keeping every single dreams of tomorrow safely

Is the constant crying of ocean bothering her a lot

Did she forget to read a bed time story for sun

Reviews

[Kieta!]

A very thought-provoking piece :) Great job :)

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot for the review, take care

[Sami Khalil]

People tend to forget and miss the target due to so many reasons. You have expressed them marvelously. Bravo.............

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot mississippe for the review, what about the pen of yours I asked you to borrow for few days

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. You are welcome...:)...................

[Linda alexander]

Take care Sami, just kidding, you earned your pen after so much toil

[Sami Khalil]

:)..........................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the word play, double meaning for "sun"

read the second line as "every single dream"...i like how she is protecting the dream...while carrying the sorrows...hoping the next day is better than the previous one, and has no more sorrow.

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot for the review, you expressed exactly what the poem meant, really wish we all can have tomorrows without any sorrows and can keep our dreams way above all sorrows