Tussle

Drained out but unable to break off the pouring

Loosing the battle still can not cease fighting

Mind is cloudy still decisions have to be made

Confused of the journey still have to make turns

Not cutting the artery of own life

Not chocking the partner when asleep

Leaving the children as orphans of this world

Or numbing all my emotions and just walk like an idiot

Is it possible to look at the world around me

Can I gather the strength from the drained out souls

Can the flat tire of bicycle be filled with air again

Can I continue the journey with undecided mind for now

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"I gather the strength from the drained out souls
Is the flat tire of the bicycle can be filled with air again
Can I continue the journey with undecided mind for now"

I like the analogy of the flat tire for drained out souls. I think you are competing with Jacob now for analogies. Bravo......................

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot Sami, Jacob is a professor in English at college level, I am clearly a medical person , I would have even stopped writing if you, Silverton and Scott were not in this site, now Chris helped me a lot, but Sami I do love complements in everything unlike two decades ago, take care

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly....:).....

[Mary Bosworth]

You clearly have the gift of expression! Your words penetrate the soul. This piece is vivid, tense, emotional, metaphorical, original and vital.

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot for the review and complement, certain dispositions we take in our journey paint as morons or idiots in society, at times wonder why some one has to take that role even

[Sami Khalil]

"artery of own life
Not chocking the partner when asleep
Leaving the children as orphans of this world"

[Linda alexander]

Some idiots do that in some vulnerable moments, really wish those episodes can be prevented, thanks Sami, take care

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:).....

[Lydia Shutter]

Lots of introspection here....questioning yourself before making the next move is always a good idea. After weighing the options, you can make a more intelligent decison. Good emotional expression here. Lydi**

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot for the review, take care Lydi

[Lydia Shutter]

You too! My pleasure.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, this is desperation....someone trapped in her life...trapped in marriage, but still there are the kids...and they matter so much to her she is willing to choke on the bad relationship then choke the husband (not literally but figuratively)----

feeling stuck in that domestic rut...

you portray the feelings strongly.

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot for the excellent review, this portraying is based on the lay man's view, if we can travel little deeper and further marriage is happening so that each partner get the support irrespective of all odds, even at times we loose ourselves and not even able to take care ourselves by draining out, there are paths every one can choose independently none is better or worse unless the core consciousness becomes the judge, loved your review, take care