Burnt thunderstorm

I saw the pyre of pain from quadruple chamber

It was pleading for help by using limbs of desperation

I partially pretended as blind and deaf

Sorry I have to walk and reserve was scant

Did you notice I spent some time to help you

You might have seen it caught me too like wildfire

The difference was it burnt me and injured deeply

I was numb partially and the urge to walk away was too real

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

" wildfire
The difference was it burnt me and injured deeply"

I felt the suffering of the narrator, the deep injuries and the urge to walk away from it all. Some people look away or pretend nothing is happening to keep the relationship afloat or just do it for the sake of children. Excellent...:).....................

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot for the most apt review, yes people do it, we can think in different perspective too, imagine a person similar to thunderstorm burning from it's own lightning associated with it, it is very hard to help thunderstorm as we can get burnt by the lightening which is an integral part of the person, what we do, we can be a lay man or legend in that case

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome Cleopatra...:).............

[Linda alexander]

Take care, mississippe

[Sami Khalil]

:)..............

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what an enticing title...and interesting imagery in this piece...i tried to assuage your pain, even though mine was so deep in itself.

[Linda alexander]

Thanks for the review and kind words, some time really wonder what is the point of helping to get burnt, still it is so hard to watch some one is burning to end themselves, so got few jacket the firemen use which definitely work to a great extend, take care

[Pushkar Prabhat]

"the urge to walk away was too real"
this line is magical!
beautiful poem.
i loved it!
:)

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot for your visit and the review, so glad to hear you really liked the last lines, take care friend

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Damn, I agree with Lydia, great metaphoric use, it only accentuates the harsh feelings and painful emotions expressed here.

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot for the review and kind words, harsh but painful that is the essence, take care friend

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome, take care yourself young lady.

[Linda alexander]

Thanks for the visit, am partially naive to the writing, take care

[Lydia Shutter]

Great metaphor in this one, Linda. So emotive! "the urge to walk away was too real".....that line packs a punch! Well written. lydi**

[Linda alexander]

Thanks a lot for the review, so glad you liked the last line, take care