Truth Is

Just a poem about the heartbreak of loving someone that you don't know from afar. From personal experience, I'm afraid. This is one of my favorite poems I've written so far so I hope others enjoy it.

Truth is,

I love your sweet brown eyes,
and wonderful dark curly hair.

Truth is,

I love your smile, your voice, your beautiful songs.

Truth is, 

I cry every day because you aren't mine.

And truth is,

I don't know why God sent me you in this way.
I Will keep praying and hope I find an answer,
or some relief from this pain.

Truth is,

I will keep loving you, even though I can't have you.

Truth is,

I don't think you'll ever have a clue how I adore you.

How true it is, 

That I wish I could put my arms around you one more time.

Author's Note

I wonder if the style of this poem makes sense to readers? I tend to write what feels right to me, even if that means the beat is off or the wording doesn't make perfect/logical sense. But I want to know how it feels to other writers/readers.

Long story short, this is dedicated to my favorite singer who I had the luck (or misfortune, perhaps, since I tend to be emotional and clingy) of meeting him one day at a concert, where he very strangely came up to me and hugged me without warning. I have so many emotions about him that I have to get them out somewhere.

Reviews

[Willow Rosings]

The style seems kind of choppy-- to be completely honest. Some lines are long, while others are short. It can be distracting to the reader when the lines vary so diversly.

Otherwise, I appreciate the evident emotional aspect poured into this piece. Everything is said from the heart. x)

[AriesGirl]

Thanks for being honest. It's a work in progress but I do tend to vary my line length.

[AriesGirl]

Let me know if you have any suggestions to salvage the style.

[Willow Rosings]

I'd try breaking your longer lines into two lines, or instead you could even lengthen your shorter lines. It's fine if there is some variation in length- -in fact, it usually reads better that way-- but the set up of the "truth is" (which is very short), then medium length lines, followed by a longer line gives a inconsistent feel.

I'd try starting with "truth is" followed by lines of medium length.

I hope this helps!

[AriesGirl]

I will work on it. Thanks for the advice!