Were I Just a Bit More...

I didn't know it bled until I picked it off

Still I know it bleeds and yet I pick it off

Disaster knows what's underneath the cover

And what's the deal with airline penis?

Casual sex or express pass vaginal tunneling?

Country w****s and city s***s?

Masculine words...

Men who secretly hate the power a nice vagina

Truly has over every single thing a virile man considers

With language a woman becomes vile

And a man becomes a player

Guilt for the strong

Pride for the weak

How very Christian of you.

Jesus probably fucked a lot of "b*****s"

Mary was just a w***e.

Reviews

[Angela Sparks]

Overall, this wasnt the best poem I've read, but it wasn't the worst. It has no clear subject, or pattern. It has a nice beat behind the words though. I'm not exactly sure what the title is connected to the poem. About Half way down though it stays on a certain subject.
"Jesus probably fucked a lot of "b*****s"
Mary was just a w***e."
If someone were not to believe the bible, but believe Mary DID have a baby and name him Jesus, this would probably be a very realistic (though harsh) view of the situation. Like I said, not perfect, not nearly, but no one's is ever perfect. Really bold though. I enjoyed it for the short amount of time it took me to read through it.

[Davidgeo]

The subject is abstract but it's there if you look for it. Mary Magdalene is who I'm referring to, not Mary mother. I think you may be even too generous, there is a certain aimlessness to the start. I'd fix it but I don't care about this poem that much. Maybe some day I'll come back to it.

[SYNN]

I do believe Mary was a w***e and like many other eccentricities of Jesus, because remember he was human, too, many actions were for examples to be written.
God kinda put females in a lesser respected category but with Mary, God showed how great Christ's mercy will be...even to the w***e. She was at the foot of the Cross with Christ's mother, Mary.
Christ IS God. The Trinity are ONE. God the Father. God the Son. God the Holy Spirit.
What an awesome writer you are!