Life Enough

Pitting the bliss of dreams against the ache of living

Is the intoxications of our imagination
Versus
The confrontations of our flesh

and the very real
completely unwound
and cut wide open

f*****g reality

of an end

we'll only know when we're Dead

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Yes, so it seems (the take-away at the end). The rest is a nice venting of angst, rage against the unknown, etc. Quite readable. 100 pinching clothespins. :)

[Davidgeo]

Thanks. I attribute it's readability to the Golden Ratio (1.6180339887...). If you can see why then you have above average scientific intuition and would probably make a good engineer.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

Hmm, 1.61803398875 ... well, I tried looking at lines, syllables, word count, etc. But it's not clicking. Guess I'll never make a good engineer. ;(

[Davidgeo]

This quote will help, but the concept is more mathematical than linguistic. "The power of the golden section to create harmony arises from its unique capacity to unite different parts of a whole so that each preserves its own identity and yet blends into the greater pattern of a single whole."
— György Dóczi, The Power of Limits

[Creepy Swine Guy]

Vert insightful poem. Did you focus on the visual shape of the poem?

[Davidgeo]

I did kinda sorta a little bit. Are you familiar with the Golden Ratio (1.6180339887...)?

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

Hmm.. OK, so perhaps look at it as made up of several components/ideas that are set in relation to each other. E.g., the succinct opposition in the first two lines being contrasted/conflicted with the (volumetric verbiage inflation)+idea(s) of the larger thought-space? Then, consider the whole thing as a "framed set" that, to some minds, should become a more pleasing abstraction of Golden Ratio. Hotter or colder? O_o

[Davidgeo]

Yeah, I like how you put that. I couldn't perfectly explain it in words as it's an irrational number but what you said is more or less correct. I think.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

omg... well, whadda ya know. Kid from Brooklyn makes good, News at 6. :)