Sustainable Economy

Adam Smith was full of s**t.

into the dirt

our petals fall

and from the soil

these flowers bloom

Author's Note

Reviews

[JayG]

Well, you did say I "don't have the balls to comment" on your work. So...

• into the dirt our petals fall

I don't know about you, but no one I know has petals. So, if you do, I guess you must be a pansy.

• and from the soil these flowers bloom

So, you told the reader something obvious. Less than exciting writing. And...there's no antecedent for the word "these." Nor have you mentioned blooming, only flowers dying. So there's a disconnect.

You wrote two simplistic declarative statements, each stating the obvious. What's in it for the reader? It has no interesting wordplay or imagery. The iubnstated pact between reader and writer is that they give you their time, and you give them worthy of it.

This is what you think I'm too cowardly to critique? Seriously? You posted something you spent a whole minute writing? Can't see it entertaining the reader.Though I suppose you might get lots of praise responses. Time will tell.

And dumping in music videos to try to make up for the writing? That's hardly professional. This is a writing site, after all. It's kind of expected that you post your own work.

See? THIS is why I don't critique your work: You've not taken the Boy Scout motto to heart: Be Prepared.

[Davidgeo]

Got ya. Congrats. You've been trolled. Thank you for verifying your participation.

[Davidgeo]

And yes... I still know you to be a coward. And now, I know that I really do own your emotional state. Ha ha.

[JayG]

And yet no one else commented on this, which IS a critique. In fact, less than half your work gets a single comment, while I get pages worth of positive comments on everything I post.

And I know that drives your obsession.

• Thank you for verifying your participation.

I sleep better at night knowing you're dying with envy, and obsessing over me.

Match me kid. Till then you're just another troll.

Understand, I could make you vanish with the click of the block button. But I don't take you that seriously.

[JayG]

And yet no one else commented on this, which IS a critique. In fact, less than half your work gets a single comment, while I get pages worth of positive comments on everything I post.

And I know that drives your obsession.

• Thank you for verifying your participation.

I sleep better at night knowing you're dying with envy, and obsessing over me.

Match me kid. Till then you're just another troll.

Understand, I could make you vanish with the click of the block button. But I don't take you that seriously.

[Davidgeo]

Who cares? Is that why you write? So strangers leave you superficial comments? Ouch. That betrays a pretty sad and pathetic internal drive.

[Davidgeo]

By the way, way to take the bait genius!! Love ya buddy!

[Davidgeo]

Also, Jay Greenstein, we would appreciate it if you would stop using AI bots and sock puppet accounts to boost views and spam this site with fake reviews. Aren't you supposed to be a "purist"? A "writing coach"? Yet... here you are, making petty beef and spamming little known sites. Is it going that bad for you irl squire greenstein? Who's fault is that son? Take some accountability for your little boy feelings... stop subjecting the world to your b***h boy insecurities.