Don't hold on to sorrow

The feeling of loneliness 

The fear of being dreamless

You put so much effort on it

you tried to be the best person

but it didn't make a difference

So you go living your life

Hoping that the sorrow will leave

But instead, it keeps on incresing

You lived with sorrow

the whole entire year

you can't shake your head out of it

But, is it really their fault?

What have i done for the sorrow to leave?

I only keep sorrow, keep all of the hurt they have done

because i didn't realise i was holding on to it.

Reviews

[Daisy]

i always think I am not going to think about this today :D wonderful poem...great job

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much daisy! This was my first poem ever writen, so really thanks

[Daisy]

great start ........ thumbs up

[Jamestown]

Good write my friend, the last line makes a ton of since. Thanks for sharing.

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much friend, I'm glad you liked it!

[Terrence Chang]

A short pointer for you Lizardo. If you plan to keep your poems short especially the stanzas make sure that you rhyme your lines as much as possible. It will refect your poems better. Although it is very good.

[Lizardo]

This one was from a long time ago, Although I must say terrence that I can hardly make my poems rhyme, thats why I only write them like that. But I will keep in mind your comment, I'll try to make them rhyme.
Thank you so much for this lovely review!

[Terrence Chang]

Rhyming is not that hard eg sorrow to hollow, increase to decrease, fault to halt and so on and on

[Lizardo]

I will try on my next poem, thank you again friend!

[Terrence Chang]

Anytime bro anytime

[Cool Girl]

Sounds like me... Again xD
I like the emotion and passion and emptiness..
Amazing job:)

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much, it's the first poem I wrote xD

[Cool Girl]

It's a very good poem:) Ur welcome:)

[Sami Khalil]

"So you go living your life
Hoping that the sorrow will leave"

A splendid read and write...:)..................

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much !

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......