New

New things, New poem..

Once a night upon the sky

Screaming owls come from my back

I got scared of those cries for help

Twice a day on earth

Ants came crawling on my toes

In a tiptoe, I had to walk

From my legs that felt like stones

When we walk between haven and earth

Our legs need to rest

Every day we walk forward

Without even knowing it

My heart sinks to death

When I smell fear close to me

I can't walk or move

When I froze

Sometimes we want to find

What's infront of us

If we could see

Beauty on everything

But we hold on

Hold on to fear

Each night there's a day

A day on the night

When I feel gravity 

Sucking me to an endless dream

Try to hold on from it

As my legs turn to steel

Iit hurts when I walk

But yet I keep going

Reviews

[Roshan Nair]

Its truly hard to think of you as a 15 year old when you write stuff like this man. Nice work! brilliant use of original metaphors

[Jimmy Yetts]

Some believe the many troubles and countless obstructions we face in everyday life are meant to either keep us from our true destiny or motivate us to fully appreciate that role, once (or if) we finally assume it.
Your poem, Lizardo, brings these notions to mind.
No matter the physical or emotional price, what choice do we have but to keep trudging on?
"New" is a thoughtful and thought-provoking offering.

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome work Lizardo. It always amazes me that you are still young but such a beautiful mind. Keep up the good work

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Aaron, I'm glad you liked it!

[W R Stowe]

Your wisdom goes far beyond your age young man and "fear" is our greatest enemy of all. Unfortunately we don't seem to fear what should be feared,Eternal Damnation being cast into the lake of fire to have torment for an eternity. Oh yea! Nice poem good insight

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this one

[W R Stowe]

your very welcome

[Valentine]

Every walk through life is a struggle, few have it easy. Valentine

[Lizardo]

That is very true, thank you so much for your review

[Cool Girl]

The last stanza is my favorite! The journey of life truly never ends, it just has multiple stages..
Your poem was so well written and I think this is my new favorite from you! Thanks for sharing :)

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Aless! I had my doubts on this one :)

[Cool Girl]

You're welcome :)
Don't have doubts..

[Lizardo]

Fine then, I wont

[Cool Girl]

Good! I'm proud of you :)

[closed]

very surreal lizardo
the mystical reality like quality is really kool too

a great new start

-Dream

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Literary, I really appreciete your review here :)

[closed]

sure thing

[CA Anurag Sharma]

wow...another great read.... beautiful!!!

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Anurag! I'm glad you liked this one

[Jamestown]

This is fantastic friend, simply great! I enjoyed every word, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Friend!