Atoms

Atoms and Molecules

We live in a world of Atoms

Living around the past and the present 

Is this about our life is all about?

Promptly I become more mature 

As time goes on

I wanna tell you 

That we're all Atoms

Rushing againts each other

We become pararell to each other

Maybe its time to become Molecules

We live in a world of Atoms 

We live in a world of darkness and light

Trouble is a pain in our head

and Mistakes will always be mistakes

I need to tell you

That we're all living a life 

Even if you feel lonely

There are atoms around you

Maybe we need to become Molecules

We dream of being humans

We begin our life since we first think

Because our mind is a great desing

I wanna confess 

That we're all Atoms

Lonely crashing into each other

Maybe we need to become Molecules

I wanna tell you

To never give up 

I wanna tell you 

That you may be an Atom

Thats because you still need to grow

Maybe we need to become molecules

Maybe we need to become Molecules.

Reviews

[sL]

This is a very effective format. I love the varying font sizes. "Promptly, I become more mature," and "and Mistakes will always be mistakes," are great lines that make me feel connected to the poem, because I relate to the words. Thank you for sharing.

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much selawson, I really appreciete this awesome review, thanks :)

[closed]

you did something amazing ...
you meshed philosophy with very loose evolutionary theory

i dont know how much you know about how that works but this feels almost scientific in the way it was written

at the core lies the theme of growth (evolution)
and longing to be more than what we are (philosophy)

the use of atoms and molecules as metaphors was fantastic

also when you made each line a different font, that was a nice touch
and the use of color for ''Molecules'' as well


you do a good job of writing about growing up and stuff IMO


all in all, this was so creative
and unique


amazing job Lizardo


-Dream

[Lizardo]

Thanks Dream. coming from you this is truely an amazing review, thanks Dream :)
I put effort on this one

[closed]

i can definitely tell
this is one of your absolute best

im going to add it to my favorites

[Lizardo]

thanks again Dream, it really means a lot :)