The Birth of Hope

Never lose sight of the hope you have been given.

In the womb of mother time,

a promise and a curse grow intertwined,

'till her head falls back and her legs do spread,

a reminder of the earthly skin she must shed,

her falling hair mixes with demons and dirt,

and her fingernails are filled with the sins of the earth,
with quivering defeat her legs whimper 'no',
but she finishes the work that father fate bestows,
and when her feeble legs do buckle and give way,
stumbling out on fresh legs comes another day,
and as this gift stumbles towards fresh light,
its faceless mother recedes back into the night.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

What an incredible write. Visceral and powerful. A write from the core! So often we write about hope as airy but this digs in. It's earthy and weighty.

[Sarah Jean]

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you thought so :)

[Audrey Rey]

I have to admit, reading it gave me goosebumps - the good kind! The visual aspect is stunning!

[Sarah Jean]

Wow, thank you! I'm really glad and I appreciate your feedback :)

[LightforChrist]

I love this poem! You did an amazing job combining imagery, prose, and poetry to tell such a wonderful story! I can't wait to read more of your writing in the future!

[Sarah Jean]

Thank you so much! Your kind words mean a lot to me :)

[Perkele.7885]

I was intrigued by your dialogue and your depth of prose! I will visit here again to see what you have for us next!

[Sarah Jean]

I'm glad you thought so, and please do I enjoy your feedback :)

[Mina]

I'm glad I got to read your poems
There so different and hooking :)
You a wonderful writer :)
I love your collection
Keep going

[Sarah Jean]

I really appreciate your taking the time to read them and give me this feedback :) Thankyou, i'm so glad you like them and i'll definitely continue xx

[Hana Saemon]

Another great one! I love reading your writing.

[Sarah Jean]

Im so glad to hear that, I really do love and appreciate your feedback :)

[Leonard Birch]

Excellent Sarah. Such a great read. Thank you!

[Sarah Jean]

I'm so glad you thought so, thank you very much!

[shallimarRose]

omg... mother earth giving birth to hope.. This whole theme is incredible.. I am so glad I happened on this one.. I just love it.. Nice form rich with metaphor that is thought provoking... shallimarRose

[Sarah Jean]

thank you so much! I love that you feel this way, huge confidence boost. Thank you for your positive feedback.

[shallimarRose]

My pleasure.. shallimarRose

[Mr. B]

This is stunning work; the diction, the flow, even the choice in layout is striking in a way I can't describe.

[Sarah Jean]

Thank you so much, it really moves me to know that there are people who enjoy my words, I'm glad you liked it :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the shape of this on the page, and the shape of the theme...brings me back to Eve...

life makes us feel dirty, used and abused sometimes...and there are those sins...but always the chance for a fresh light...

this is like redemption...i like the metaphor of being in the womb of mother time...

pregnant clocks of nature....

you are a talented writer!

jacob

[Sarah Jean]

Thank you again, I appreciate the time you take to read and offer me feedback. And thank you for thinking I'm a talented writer, as writing is something I intend to pursue after finishing school.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

seems to me you are pursuing quite nicely, now.