River

recalling my happy childhood memories :) and i had it on facebook... i wanted it published here for some reason

prefect jelly surface
of clear rain water
with embankments of boulders
reveal to me the beauty and wonder 
of the whole universe

Author's Note

its not perfect i know but i liked it; you can critique it if you like i don't mind. in fact that what i want :)

Reviews

[Tony]

Raindrops, boulders, a river-- the universe.
The interconnectedness of infinite beauty.

M

[Wondering Mind]

there's a mystery in water that affects..It's effects often lead to a higher level of thought or tender emotion..Lovely write.

[.]

my goodness-you are so open and existential with your work-very keen indeed!!!

B/W

[An owl on the moon]

You move us from a very personal moment.. this beautiful place.. and then let us see the vastness of all that is.. Life and beauty in the full expanse of a river running on its way.

[DamienHino]

EPIC! your a natural freestyle lyricist

[A.A.Romanczuk]

I personally like its brevity...I think it sums up the magic of nature....and the nature of the river...and it's lovely :)

[Caitlynxoxo]

i liked this :) short, concise, in other words; short and sweet! Your detail was beautiful. I found myself imagining this lake, and by the sounds of it, and from what i saw, it as well is beautiful. Thanks for sharing

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo