when we were young

when we were young

A Poem by lorynrrr

when we were young we use to play out

in the sun all day

i wonder why it rained maybe because

we were all in vain

life should go on and never stop

i wish i was an angel to watch

you at the top

© 2009 lorynrrr


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This poem is kinda morbid and sad at the end....but Continue writing, girl! Don't let anyone tell you to stop. Writing is an excellent way to express your feelings and it can become an art! Good luck! Cheers!

Posted 17 Years Ago
i like the scene of the poem
this is a really good ryhme

life should go on and never stop

i wish i was an angel to watch

you at the top



Posted 17 Years Ago


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 Added on March 17, 2009

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lorynrrr
lorynrrr

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hey my name is loryn and im 13 and i like to sing i have a really good personality god made me cant you see i'v also an awesome family say what just kiddin so this is me i have green eyes dark dirt.. more..