i love you

l love you and you love me

why can't any body see

it does not  who we are as long as

were together under the stars

 my love for you is loving an true

 i would not give it away

unless its okay if i give i to you 

Reviews

[Nathan Durham]

This was really good. I do agree with previous reviews that there are some typographical errors, but that can easily be dealt with. You put really powerful emotion into this. Good job. I plan to read more of your work in the future.

[Laura E. Aranda]

any body
needs to be together: 'anybody'

In this line:
it does not who we are as long as
I think you need to add the word 'matter' between 'not' and 'who'


and the last thing:
In your line:
my love for you is loving an true

Between the words loving AND true you used an.....add a 'd' and make it 'and' , Okay?

Just wanted to point that out to you so you can make your art perfect! LOL

Cheers!

[Ross]

short, sweet, cute, and simple :)
although, I think a word may be missing from this line
it does not who we are as long as