Within or Without

Contradictions of life

Inside a silent moment
The breath of life takes hold.
Inside the shell of a man
The breath of death escapes.
It is in between that putrid pages
Of rotting stories are coupled with
The Exuberant exhale of
Fantastical journeys and
The exodus of innocence.
Too complicated,
thoughts form into words
of little meaning
and yet that within
strives to make sense of them.
Form order from fog or sunshine
where form is not possible.
Inside a contradiction
lies the human task
of putting together a life of meaning.

Reviews

[scripted]

this was a good write... "a life of meaning " something all of us have, but very few of us fully seem to take hold of... i love the piece nice job!!! yours truely Danielle

[Lewis Davis-Norman]

I like it from a poetic point of view. The language is mature and really good. I'm not sure I fully understand it because it is complicated, but that doesn't undermine the thoughtfulness that has clearly gone into writing this poem. I think you should be proud of what you have written here. 'The exodus of innocence' is especially poignant.

[falling_toxic_rain]

I think its good.
The beginning and the end really do complimebt each other nice write.

[LynGeist]

Thank you. Sometimes it's hard to know in the heat of the moment.. Or the heat of the write in should say.

[falling_toxic_rain]

You're welcome. :)

[LynGeist]

Is it maybe too complicated? Too hard to make sense out of? It made perfect sense when I wrote it lol