Goodbye

You were there,
Your mind was not.
Eyes tearing off into the sunset.
Cheeks brushed gently by the sneaking rays.

I was there,
With words to say -
Goodbye, farewell...
If I may...no, I must not...

Clawing at those escaping moments,
Trying to stretch them in vain.
You go!
Into the sunset you love so much.

I stay...
When you are gone and far away,
I will watch everything disappear,
Crumbling with the last breath of our day.

Reviews

[Tom McRoberts]

Beautiful. Really captures the pain inherent in losing a loved one, this shows through most in the second stanza, the effort it takes to say no more aloud is palpable. Great stuff, keep it up!

[Leo]

Thanks a lot Tom! I really appreciate your kind words and exciting review. And speaking of words...things left unsaid might haunt you forever indeed, but on the other hand - when all was said, better just let go at some point...

[Tom McRoberts]

Very true. You're welcome, glad to give feedback to fellow writers.