Searching

In the unraveling of day,
who among us will join the search
for our tomorrow?

Is a hunt that never ends,
born of minds forever trained
to blindly follow?

Lost in tremors here and now,
can you see the future
in the past?

Can you satiate what lingers,
when you're running with the first
or the last?

Reviews

[ETERNITY]

Hi Brandon, this, to me, runs kind of Muckety muck for the sake of the rhyme.
I mean, I can make sense of it but readers are usually lazy.
I like to be bitten by the write.
RIP off my body parts and maul me with them.
Was that too much? lol
I appreciate the effort :)

[Brandon Houser]

It wasn't too much. I was actually amused by this. I appreciate you reading.

[Rosie C]

I admire the twists and turns in this.

It throws the reader from one side to other.

Intriguing and curious for more.

[Brandon Houser]

Thank you Rosie. I am glad you felt the twists and turns. I was going to something both anxious and still in the piece.

[Chris Shaw]

Can you see the future in the past, you can learn from it and maybe it can set a new path forward. Maybe we do need both.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Probably need both in the end.

[Curly Grace]

There’s a stillness in these questions that feels true. A quiet, honest search.