Broken heart acrostic

Believing you when you said you loved me, believing your lies

Robbed of my heart, left shattered

Over and Over I replay in my mind what I could have done wrong

Kneeling at your feet, begging you to say

Everyone could see though you, everyone but me

Never forgetting the way you held my hand

 

 

Having lost the will to love anyone but you

Even after what you did, I still love you

Always you said, always you lied

Raw and broken

Tears of betrayal falling free   

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Darker

May 8, 2015

 

• Dark Acrostic
• Broken heart acrostic

 

 

 

 

3rd place

Mar 14, 2015

 

• Limerick, Acrostic, & Haiku
• Broken heart acrostic

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Broken heart

Reviews

[Justin]

really amazing job :) u were able to talk about a subject that us as people experience and put it into your own way, the format is awesome :) i really liked how you used each letter, it made it even better :) amazing job :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you very much Justin!!!

[Justin]

your welcome lorna :) i added it to my library :) keep it up and i will continue to read :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Oh wow cool!!!!

[Justin]

yup :) it is pretty awesome :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:-D...........

[Justin]

we are pretty awesome :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Yes Justin we are!

[Justin]

aint no one stopping us now lol

[Valkyrie Warrior]

No way!! We are the champions my friend!

[Justin]

yup we are :P

[Valkyrie Warrior]

!!!!!!!!! :-D

[luvs2write]

I really liked this!! You're good at acrostics, but I do have a question. I wonder if instead of putting two of each letter (like N: Never forgetting....) you should just do one? I feel like having two letters kind of distracts the reader from the emotion of the poem. Then again, that could just be 100% me. =) This is good, keep it up!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

That is a good idea my friend I think I will change it! Thank u for the review!

[Jamestown]

Absolutely fantastic piece, very creative! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Wow a review so quickly!!Thank you so much!!!!

[Jamestown]

You are so welcome!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

If you don't mind me asking, how did you find and review this piece so quickly? I mean I only just published it.

[Jamestown]

On the live feed, go to live feed and you can view several pieces!
Keep writing and b-blessed!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Oh cool! Just wanted to know.....